I am unknown to the ones of my kind
When a darkness clouds the rays of sunshine.
The rain that erases the constant bleak
everyone shies, and their knees become weak.
Prevailing omnipresent blessing now,
living on ways of inspiration and how
I do not know but my people must keep,
while they are wishing and dreaming in sleep.
I will be hiding and hoping away,
that I can be seen in new light someday.
Sam,
ReplyDeletePoetry is a difficult genre to respond to for many reasons. In this poem and in some of your other work, I hear you talking about how much you differ from those around you; how you do not fit in, do not care about the same things...how you crave something bigger. Something more. It is strange to respond to this because I see this in you-- you are different. You are solemn and serious in a way that the vast majority of others your age are not. So, as I read this poem and others, I find myself nodding....but also wondering how much of these feelings and thoughts are actually true.
For example, I once wrote a poem called "Sobriety for my Sister" and received overwhelming responses about how others read it, prayed for me, prayed for my sister, and related to it because their own sibling was abusing him or herself. I don't have a sister; I haven't experienced alcoholism in my immediate life....it was just writing.
So, I guess my question is: are these true thoughts and feelings or are they just writing? It's not like it matters...in fact, if your answer is "just writing", my question speaks to how good your writing is because I believe it to be real. I am more just curious.
Its a little bit of both actually. Usually when I write, it is based on something that I have experienced, something about me. Depending on how I want the poem to sound, I may add certain words. A lot of times when I write, my goal for the poem is how the words sound together, without actually straying from the original topic. But the poem are "exaggerated" a bit so they can actually sound poetic. I do sometimes write about things that I have never experienced, or are from a different perspective. So to answer your question, it varies.
ReplyDeleteSometimes is may sound like I am completely depressed by the fact of being different. Don't worry about me, I actually quite enjoy it. I have absolutely no desire to be like everyone else. I like my character, and the person I am, and have become to be, and I think that is why I write about that specific topic so much, because I have a lot of say about it, from many points of perspectives.
ReplyDeletesorry for all the explanation comments but I had a good example. The poem I wrote entitled "loss" is not a metaphor. I was originally inspired when my pen died, and I had a miniature writers block because I didn't want to write with a different pen. Words just come to me about the most random things, and I write them down on a sticky note and save them for later. I have a bunch of ideas for a poem about laundry (which will be inspired by laundry but might have a metaphor) that I haven't even used yet.
ReplyDeleteHi Again, Sam--
ReplyDeleteSorry my response has been a few days in coming. In response to your responses....in a somewhat organized fashion....
All of your writing is poetic; the ability to know exactly what words to add, take away, or how to arrange thoughts and words on a page is not something that comes naturally nor easily to many people. I marvel at your ability to express yourself and your thoughts so precisely and exactly in everything you write.
I am not worried about you at all- in fact, quite the contrary. You are a deep thinker, an individual, a chameleon. I sense that you are totally, 100% at piece with who you are and I find that AMAZING. It's hard enough for adults to be as well-adjusted and comfortable in their own skin as you are, and you are only 14.
Anyone who can turn laundry into a poem impresses me. As I think about it as I write, it would be a lovely metaphor for renewal among other things. Your habit of using sticky notes to jot your thoughts down is something some of the best writers do...when you have that inspiration, it must be captured.